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Topic Subject:Battle of Britain
empireofpwn
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posted 07-09-10 09:35 AM EDT (US)         
This is the story of the greatest battle in the history of britain(me).

i started as allies with the germans. we were very happy being freinds and trading money and oil. but then france declared war on germany me being allieds with germany i got involved i did not want to be, so i cancelled the alliance then proposed peace with france they accepted. i then lived my nation in peace for the entire industrial age. thet french-german war still raging. thet germans declared war on me.

i built 5 aircraft carriers once i got into the modern age. then launched a massive wave of fighter/bombers from the carriers. only 5 out of 60 survived. so i sent in a wave of lancaster bombers and bombed there radar stations. i succeeded. i re-launched the second wave from the carreirs but they also had planes. the battle for the skys commenced. they sent only one wave every 5 minutes however i sent 10 waves at once. i succeded the battle was turned to my favour. the french then developed nuclear weapons (the french-german war is stil on) the french then nuked germanys city berlin

i felt this a good chance to launch my ground assault. i captured the the germans outer city before launching afew V2 rockets at berlin. then the ground assault commenced once again. i succeded.

germany was history. me and france lived the rest of our lives in peace. until i nuked the crap out of them but that is another story

[This message has been edited by empireofpwn (edited 07-09-2010 @ 09:37 AM).]

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zedpenguin
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posted 07-30-10 04:48 AM EDT (US)     1 / 2       
ARRGGHH, my eyes.
please learn to puntuate a little better, i dont think i saw any more than 2 or 3 commas, if any. Also you need capital letters after a fullstop you also use fullstops where there should be commas.If your foreign, or english isnt your first language i dont blame you

good story though.
Soviet_Comrade
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posted 07-30-10 04:51 AM EDT (US)     2 / 2       
I must agree with zedpenguin on both points: Great story, but needs better punctuation.

Also, the last paragraph of it made me LOL.
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